TR
Task Response
- The essay addresses all parts of the task, presenting a clear position and discussing both views
- However, the argument could be strengthened with more specific examples and deeper analysis.
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TASK 2May 31, 2026, 05:38 PM
7.5
Band
TR8.0CC8.0LR7.5GRA6.5
Section 01
Criteria Breakdown
Official IELTS Writing rubric scores with examiner-style feedback.
8.0
CC
Coherence & Cohesion
- The essay is well-organized with clear progression of ideas
- Cohesive devices are used effectively, but some transitions could be smoother.
LR
Lexical Resource
- The essay uses a range of vocabulary with some less common items
- However, there are instances of repetition and some word choices could be more precise.
GRA
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
- A solid range of complex sentences is present, but occasional awkward phrasing and article/determiners issues hold GRA below the strongest criterion scores.
Strategy
Improvement Strategy
Priority actions to raise your band on the next attempt.
The essay presents a clear position and discusses both views effectively. However, it could benefit from more specific examples and a deeper exploration of the mechanisms by which parents and schools influence children's development. Additionally, some grammatical errors and lexical choices could be refined for a higher score.
Section 02
Idea development
Depth of arguments by paragraph — what to add for stronger Task Response.
Depth4/5
The essay presents a clear argument but lacks depth in supporting examples and mechanisms.
Introduction
specificity
Main idea: Present both views and personal opinion.
- Include a brief mention of why each view is significant.
Body 1
mechanismexample
Main idea: Schools are suitable for teaching children to be good citizens.
- Explain how schools instill societal values beyond cognitive development.
- Provide a specific example of a school program that teaches citizenship.
Body 2
mechanism
Main idea: Parents play a crucial role in teaching children to be good citizens.
- Discuss how parental influence shapes children's values and behaviors.
- Include a specific example of parental teaching methods.
Conclusion
specificity
Main idea: Domestic upbringing has a more significant impact.
- Summarize the key reasons why parental influence is more impactful.
Section 03
Lexical upgrade
Weak Band 5–6 words from the essay → C1/C2 synonyms with example sentences.
CEFR vocabulary
5 upgrades from your essay
C1 · Band 7–8C2 · Band 8–9
B5–6consider
C1Band 7–8regardview
C2Band 8–9deemperceive
B5–6best
C1Band 7–8optimalmost effective
C2Band 8–9supremeparamount
B5–6advantageous
C1Band 7–8beneficialfavorable
C2Band 8–9advantageouspropitious
B5–6crucial
C1Band 7–8essentialvital
C2Band 8–9pivotalindispensable
B5–6impact
C1Band 7–8effectinfluence
C2Band 8–9repercussionramification
Section 04
Linguistic Insights
Linking words, repetition alerts, and originality.
Linking words
Flow 4/9Found
althoughhoweverfor examplefurthermorein conclusion
Suggested additions
+ moreover+ consequently+ therefore
Frequency alert
- “children”7×youngstersyouthoffspring
- “parents”4×guardianscaregivers
Section 05
Detailed Corrections
5 actionable fixes with explanations.
- 1Vocabulary
Correction
I believe that family upbringing plays a more pivotal role
Why: Lexical Error: 'Deem' is less commonly used in this context. 'Believe' is more appropriate for expressing personal opinion.
- 2Logic
Original
With standardized educational methods, schools can foster children’s cognitive development so that they are able to contribute to society in the future.
CambridgeCorrection
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Why: Logic Error: The sentence does not clearly link cognitive development with being a good member of society. The connection between education and societal contribution needs to be more explicit.
- 3Logic
Original
However, these people only represent a small fraction of the total number of students attending schools, and thus sending children to schools cannot be the best method of educating them to be good members of society.
CambridgeCorrection
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Why: Logic Error: The conclusion that sending children to schools cannot be the best method is too strong based on the evidence provided. It needs more support or a more nuanced argument.
- 4Vocabulary
Original
I perceive that parents play a more crucial role in teaching them how to be good citizens.
CambridgeCorrection
I believe that parents play a more crucial role in teaching children how to be good citizens.
Why: Lexical Error: 'Perceive' is less commonly used in this context. 'Believe' is more appropriate for expressing personal opinion.
- 5Logic
Original
In Vietnam, the average class size is 20 students, which makes it difficult for educators to provide proper schooling for each student.
CambridgeCorrection
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Why: Logic Error: The statement about class size does not directly support the argument that parents are better at teaching children to be good citizens. The link needs to be clearer.
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